Explain why the following letter of application is ineffective. Rewrite it to make it more precise and appropriate. Please read page 280 to page 288. Letter:
Apartment 32
Jeggler Drive
Talcott, Arizona
Monday
Grandt Corporation
Production Supervisor
Capital City, Arizona
Dear Sir:
I am writing to ask you if your company will consider me for the position you announced online recently. I believe that with my education (I have an associate degree) and experience (I have worked four years as a freight supervisor), I could fill your job.
My schoolwork was done at two junior colleges, and I took more than enough courses in business management and information technology. In fact, here is a list of some of my courses: Supervision, Materials Management, Work Experience in Management, E-commerce, Safety Tactics, Introduction to Software Analysis, Art Design, Contemporary Business Principles, and Small Business Management. In addition, I have worked as a loading dock supervisor for the last two years, and before that I worked in the military in the Quartermaster Corps.
Please let me know if you are interested in me. I would like to have an interview with you at the earliest possible date, since there are some other firms also interested in me, too.
Eagerly yours,
George D. Milhous
