A Student on a Budget

After reviewing attached file with two paragraphs A and B select one :

Which paragraph is better in terms of unity, support, and coherence?

What elements of your chosen paragraph show unity?

What elements of your chosen paragraph show support?

What elements of your chosen paragraph show coherence?

Which elements would you remove? Why?

In what ways can you add to the coherence?

Parameters:

  1. Choose either paragraph A or B to revise
  2. Then, copy and paste the paragraph you have chosen
  3. Show the parts of the paragraph you would consider removing (by making the font red)
  4. Add supporting elements that would demonstrate coherence within the paragraph (make the font a different color)
  5. Rewrite your final revision of the paragraph in the discussion board, making sure it has support, unity, and coherence
  6. Make a plan (outline) that would support that paragraph
  7. Finally, answer the questions that were asked above the paragraphs concerning unity, support, and coherence