Please Edit the paper attached according to the feedback. Please make sure to add solid evidence that backs up my argument. Add more sources if you need to.
FeedBack:
Try retitling your paper and focusing more on the impact of women’s exclusion on post-conflict stability in Afghanistan. In other words, you need to demonstrate how it affects stability, not just mention that it will negatively impact it
The paper lays the groundwork for arguing that Taliban rule undermines Afghanistan’s stability by limiting women’s education, employment, and social participation. However, the connection between these restrictions and national stability requires more robust evidence and explicit analysis. Incorporating additional data, case studies, and comparative examples would strengthen the argument significantly.
Be more specific. You need to demonstrate how such restrictions affect economic and social development in post-conflict Afghan society and its stability.
