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Master storyteller Valeria Luiselli has a special talent for using her storytelling lens to transform the ordinary into the exceptional. In this little article, we’ll take a closer look at a curious legal situation: an inanimate lake suing in a US courtroom.So, if you look above at the two sentences–they don’t have anything to do with one another (unless you are in our class and you know I’ve asked students to use Luiselli’s style to investigate the environmental crisis portrayed in the newspaper article. So, the second sentence is a “non-sequitur” (a break, quick change of direction). Your insights into Luiselli’s style/techniques/moves is very clear. To improve the coherence of the essay, I would suggest that you first begin with a paragraph describing Luiselli’s style and then pose the question: what would she make of the situation descried in this news article?That sets up for your reader (assuming they are not in the class) what are you are doing in the essay.Does that make sense?WP file: https://www.mediafire.com/file/2f48b9c5ljvilgd/WP+‘.pages/file
