Week 13 – Day 1 – Assignment 2 – Peer Reviews – Due Date: 5/23
You will be assigned 1 of your peers’ Chapter 4 to provide a peer review. Please read the following instructions and answer the questions that follow. I attached the chapter that you will review to your individual assignment submission box. Let me know if you can’t access it.
Peer Review Instructions for Writing Assignment
Reviewer:
Instructions
Read each persons Chapter (attached) twice. In the first reading, just get the feel of the essays organization and pointsmake large-scale comments if they occur to you as you read.
In the second reading, start to fine-tune your feedback.
Make comments on the draft, and then write some feedback on this sheet (use complete
sentences and be as thorough as you can).
Questions/Comments to Consider:
1. Do you have any concerns about the writers submission?
2. From the findings, are you able to identify the problem? Solution if any? Explain.
3. Organization and transitions: Look through the essay and take note of the way the writer moves
from point to point, from one paragraph to the next. Do major ideas seem to be organized in a
logical way?
4. Support: Identify any areas in the essay that seem to need greater support in concrete evidence or
more explanation. Also, point out places where the writer needs to clarify how the evidence given.
supports the argument.
5. Grammar/Spelling/Mechanics: Identify patterns you see in grammar, punctuation, and spelling
errors. Point to at least one example of each pattern in the draft.
Chapter 4I went to 3 different gym locations in Los Angeles and asked 100 men and 100 women these 3 questions. Do you ever feel uncomfortable working out at the gym? How often do you come to the gym? Would you prefer to workout at a gender segregated gym? 12% of men and 67% of women said that they have felt uncomfortable working out at the gym? 32% of men said they come to the gym 3 times a week, and 63% of women said they come to the gym once a week. 2% of men and 29% of women said that they would prefer to workout at a gender segregated gym. This shows a trend that tells me a few things. One thing I noticed is that the high percent of women feeling uncomfortable at the gym may be directly correlated to the lackof frequency throughout the week at the gym for women. Only 15% of women said that they go to the gym more than twice a week. Also, thelow percentage of both men and women that would prefer gender segregated gyms has a particular connotation to it as well. The fact that almost all the people questioned have never experienced a gender segregated gym and also the fact that the idea of seeing great bodies of the opposite sex is part of motivation to come to the gym in general for both men and women. Most women said they feel that the attention they get from the men at the gym seems aggressive, but they still appreciate some attention, however. Men also enjoy having the women to motivate them to showcase their strength atthe gym but also a substantial motivator as well.This tell me that the gym culture with both me and women sharing thatspace with boosted testosterone and skintight clothing teasing the mind of the lurkers, that sexual harassment is normal in this environment. Out of the 100 women questioned 73% of them have said that they have been harassed or even stalked by someone at the gym. This tells me that there needs to be more options for these women to go workout and not have to just hope they dont get pressured by a overly aggressive creep at the gym. Theres a need fora chain of commercial women only gyms that women can feel comfortable in. Not only a safe haven away from potential harassmentfrom these overly aggressive men but also a place where the shy can come improve their body and not feel embarrassed because men are around. Also a place they dont have to feel intimidated by these
stereotypes about how lifting weights will make you look like a man, but they will see other women that are beautiful and strong and realizethat there are tons of benefits in weightlifting and it will not make you look like a man. Learn tips from female fitness professionals and learnabout how fitness can help them with their pains throughout their menstrual cycle as well s stress relief. These are just some examples of things that women will be more open to learning without the intimidations of men being around preventing that.
